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Me and Crit - a whine

Or maybe Crit and Me?

Yesterday, I posted Whispers in the Television Without Pity Smallville Fanfic Thread. This may have been a mistake because it looks like the stories there have tended to the cute and fluffy (how one writes a cute and fluffy Smallville is something else again) , so my dark and shocking little story is...dark and shocking. Since I was unfamiliar with that thread, I didn't realize that. My fault.

My story squicked them. Huh. I should be flattered. I squicked an entire thread with one word. "Daddy."

It was meant to be disturbing. It seems to have worked. In fact, it seems to have made that thread the busiest one on the Smallville forum. Yes, I'm bitter.

It's not the crit itself, at least not for the most part. I don't *care* (okay, I do, but I understand that tastes differ, so I can shrug it off) that people don't like the story. And I really understand those who think it was squicksome, as it was meant to be, and not everyone likes that. Most people don't. It's the snide comments about me as a writer - the horrors of "shockfic" and how "anvilicious" it was. That means "How badly I'd overdid the foreshadowing."

So, if the ending was a surprise, it's bad, and if it wasn't, it's bad. I can't win.

I suspect that particular person read the story, was shocked and went back and noticed that I had actually foreshadowed. And that's going to jump out on second viewing. But I could be wrong.

I'm sensitive about my writing itself. Not the stories, not even the characterization, because I know I see things differently than a lot of people, but the writing itself. I think my writing is good. Not the best, not great, but *good*. Readable. Could stand improvement, and I'm working on it,, but not *bad*.

But I'm too close to it, so I could be wrong. Even so, to be criticised because I either had too much or too little foreshadowing - that hurt. And to be criticised because I was squicky, and didn't warn...well. *sigh*

Current Mood: whiney

I thought the story was fine. It's not the sort of thing I like, no, hence the lack of LOC. But it was well-written. I think there was enough foreshadowing that you knew something was wrong, but the details of WHAT, exactly, was wrong weren't there. I suspected, but only that, *suspected*. And I have history and reason to recognize certain symptoms. I thought you did well. I was disappointed in Clark for not noticing the problem sooner, but his age, naivete, and many other factors can excuse him. And I thought it was well-characterized enough that I *did* have those feelings of disappointment in CLARK, not in the author.

Clark is a highly sheltered sixteen year old from a loving family. He knows intellectually that such abuse exists, but it isn't real for him.

And now it is, and if I write a sequel to this, it's how he deals or doesn't deal with this.

Also, his hormones were in high gear. :)